Discussion Groups / English Usage / January 2007

Can anyone tell me of my grammarictal mistake? Also, Are the paragraphs
well structures, and I am able to express myself  effectively. ? I know
this is not exactly a homework thing.  I am trying to know my weakness
so I can work on them.

Thanks

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Do Microsoft's users deserve our sympathy and compassion?

My answer would be yes, and here is why:

Micro$oft's users don't want to know the truth. This is not surprising
because as the saying goes; truth is stranger then fictions. We must
remember that these people have been using Microsoft's products for a
decade. They have become addicted to propriety software. Their
addiction have transformed them into the lemming. In fact, and some of
them have reach a point where they will sell their own daughters, and
then deliver it to a brothel. To a Microsoft user Linux is nothing more
then a virtual or physical pornography. Therefore, arguing with him
useless.

We should note that a typical Microsoft's user is a lemming. A Lemming
is an educated illiterate. When he goes to a school for an education,
it has an opposite affect on him.  It gravitates him a step further
towards  illiteracy. For example; an educated lemming following
Microsoft's orthodoxy will be listening to an iPOD, waving a cellphone
on their way to school, and university.  A lemming can read a book, do
his homework, however, he is unable use this knowledge as a tool of
thoughts to obtains verifiable results by reasoning logically. No,
mentally he is closer to a trained monkey.

Comrades, Microsoft's will remain popular among lemmings. When they buy
computers and laptops and they don't even know about a virial disease,
masquerading itself as an Operating System, and they graciously aspect
it. There is no point explaining to them,. These convalescent are
descends of those who believe that earth was flat, and the heavens move
around the earth. Therefore, we should not be surprise that lemmings -
just like their forefathers -- don't sit down and think analytically
like rest of us. We should think of ourself as nurses, these patients
"Microsoft's users" are sick, and there is no point of scolding them.
They need to be healed, and the rest of the public needs to educated.
It would be helpful if everyone knew: Windows is a disease, you catch
it from Microsoft.

How about you guys?