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J.Cymone - 22 May 2009 03:26 GMT

Hello, this is probably easy as pie for you all, but this non-writer and
somewhat illiterate needs help.

What is the correct or best way to write a statement containing particulars
?

Example:

I made three transfers for the amounts of $100, $200, and $300, in April,
June and July.

I made a transfer of the amount of $100 in May, and another transfer of $200
in June.

In May, I made a transfer for the amount of $100, and in June another
transfer for the amount of $200.

Help appreciated

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mywings - 22 May 2009 13:58 GMT

> Hello, this is probably easy as pie for you all, but this
> non-writer and somewhat illiterate needs help.
>
> What is the correct or best way to write a statement containing
> particulars ?

There is probably no single best way to word statements like
this. The important thing is to be clear.

> Example:
>
> I made three transfers for the amounts of $100, $200, and
> $300, in April, June and July.

You could add "respectively" after "July", and that would clarify
that the $100 belongs to April, the $200 to June, and the $300 to
July. "I made three transfers for the amounts of $100, $200, and
$300, in April, June and July respectively.

> I made a transfer of the amount of $100 in May, and another
> transfer of $200 in June.
>
> In May, I made a transfer for the amount of $100, and in June
> another transfer for the amount of $200.

The above two examples are also very clear and would work equally
well, if not better, than your first sentence. You could also
just make three separate sentences: "I transferred $100 in April.
I transferred $200 in June. I transferred $300 in July."

> Help appreciated

Alice

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