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san - 11 Jan 2007 08:09 GMT

We focus on e business solutions at low prices serving the needs of
small to medium businesses all over the world. We offer a wide range of
custom web site design development and seo services at affordable
prices starting from small presentation sites to complex
multifunctional web portals and advanced custom e-commerce business
solutions.
Service is everything - your satisfaction is guaranteed
That is why we would gladly accept the responsibility of taking care of
your site. We want to save your time, so that you could devote yourself
to the most important thing - your business. Allow us to maintain and
support your web site.
Money back guarantee
A 30 Day money back guarantee for the first monthly fee.

Fillup the below information for further inquarry.
Contact Name :
Organization Name:
E-mail Address :
Phone no:
Call us for Demostration
Call : 2390177 / 9841206820
click here for more information
http://www.max-online.biz/idevaffiliate/idevaffiliate.php?id=749

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Oleg Lego - 12 Jan 2007 07:13 GMT

The san entity posted thusly:

>We focus on e business solutions at low prices serving the needs of
>small to medium businesses all over the world.

Are you using "e" as the mathematical number? If so, the sentence is
seriously flawed in content. If not, it is an incorrect usage of a
prefix.

> We offer a wide range of
>custom web site design development

Is that "custom web (site design)" or "custom website design", or
perhaps "custom web-site design"?

> and seo services at affordable prices

"seo"?

> starting from small presentation sites to complex
>multifunctional web portals and advanced custom e-commerce business
>solutions.

Prices don't "start from sites". They start at values or amounts.

>Service is everything - your satisfaction is guaranteed

This sentence requires a period.

>That is why we would gladly accept the responsibility of taking care of
>your site.

What is the reason you "would" gladly accept...?

> We want to save your time, so that you could devote yourself
>to the most important thing - your business.

Should be "save you time". Should be "so that you can" or "so that you
may"

> Allow us to maintain and support your web site.

Sounds like a command.

>Money back guarantee

This sentence requires a period, but more importantly, your subject
reads "Free Website Designing Solution.", so it makes me wonder how I
get money back if I haven't paid you anything.

>A 30 Day money back guarantee for the first monthly fee.

Sentence fragment. It has no verb.

>Fillup the below information for further inquarry.

If you want something put into a container, you should say "Fill up".
If you want someone to enter information in a form, you should use
"fill out" or "fill in".

"The below" is not idiomatic.
"Inquiry" is the word you are looking for.

The sentence is extremely bad as it stands. I would suggest something
like "For further information, please fill in the following form."

>Contact Name :
>Organization Name:
>E-mail Address :
>Phone no:
>Call us for Demostration

This should probably be "Call us for a demonstration." Note the
spelling and capitalization.

>Call : 2390177 / 9841206820

You supply a telephone number, but have not taken into account that
most of the people of the world do not live in your country, and have
no idea how to call you using those numbers.

>click here for more information
>http://www.max-online.biz/idevaffiliate/idevaffiliate.php?id=749

Capitalize "Click", or better still, say "For further information,
see:"

It was a good first effort, and with a lot of practice, you may one
day have sufficient english skills to attract the business of native
English speakers.

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