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Discussion Groups / English Usage / August 2007Any errors in the paragraph?
Can you find any errors in the following paragraph? I¡¯m a civil servant. Everybody around me envies me and always says that you have a stable and well-paid job, but I really don¡¯t like it. Since I practiced yoga, I have deeply liked the exercise. So I want to leave the job and commit myself to practice yoga. But I can¡¯t make up my mind to do it because of the pressure from my family and friends. Now I am distracted by the desire and the pressure. What should I do? > Can you find any errors in the following paragraph? > > I'm a civil servant. Everybody around me envies me and always > says that you "I", not "you". > have a stable and well-paid job, but I really don't like it. > Since I practiced "Since I have begun to practice" or "Since I have begun practicing" > yoga, I have > deeply liked This is not the best English style even though it's normal Chinese and Japanese. I would just leave it out and say "Since I have begun practicing yoga, I have wanted to resign from my job and commit myself to practicing yoga full-time. However, ..." > the exercise. So "exercise, so" OR "exercise. Therefore," or "exercise; therefore," > I want to leave the job and commit myself to practice "practicing" > yoga. But I "yoga, but I" or "yoga. However, I" or "yoga; however, I" > can't make up my mind to do it because of the pressure from my > family and friends. Now I am distracted by the desire and the > pressure. What should I do?  SignatureFranke: EFL teacher & medical editor Native speaker of American English; posting from Taiwan. "It has come to my attention that my opinions are not universally shared." Scott Adams. "cybercypher" <cybercypher75@aol.com> дÈëÏûÏ¢ÐÂÎÅ :Xns999BB808CD561ccyep@130.133.1.4... > [quoted text clipped - 34 lines] > > family and friends. Now I am distracted by the desire and the > > pressure. What should I do? Thanks for your assistance! > "cybercypher" <cybercyphe...@aol.com> дÈëÏûÏ¢ÐÂÎÅ > :Xns999BB808CD561cc...@130.133.1.4... [quoted text clipped - 37 lines] > > Thanks for your assistance!- I agree with what the other poster has said, but this also strikes me as odd: > can't make up my mind to do it because of the pressure from my > family and friends. Now I am distracted by the desire and the > pressure. What should I do? "distracted" - you mean "upset" but the more obvious meaning is "with my eye off the ball". "desire" - you mean "upset" but the more obvious meaning is "lust". "pressure" - you mean "the pressure my family and friends are applying" but the more meaning here is "pressure caused by not concentrating fully on my lust" :) How about: "Now I am torn between taking the path I so desperately want to follow and the path which everyone says I must take". > > "cybercypher" <cybercyphe...@aol.com> дÈëÏûÏ¢ÐÂÎÅ > > :Xns999BB808CD561cc...@130.133.1.4... [quoted text clipped - 47 lines] > "distracted" - you mean "upset" but the more obvious meaning is "with > my eye off the ball". Oops! "desire" - you mean "wish" but the more obvious meaning is "lust". "Troy Steadman" <troysteadman@yahoo.co.uk> ??????:1188394319.887487.307040@g4g2000hsf.googlegroups.com... On 29 Aug, 14:17, "windcolor" <feiyanfa...@163.com> wrote: > "cybercypher" <cybercyphe...@aol.com> дÈëÏûÏ¢ÐÂÎÅ > :Xns999BB808CD561cc...@130.133.1.4... [quoted text clipped - 39 lines] > > Thanks for your assistance!- I agree with what the other poster has said, but this also strikes me as odd: > can't make up my mind to do it because of the pressure from my > family and friends. Now I am distracted by the desire and the > pressure. What should I do? >"distracted" - you mean "upset" but the more >obvious meaning is "with >my eye off the ball". >"desire" - you mean "upset" but the more obvious >meaning is "lust". >"pressure" - you mean "the pressure my family >and friends are >applying" but the more meaning here is "pressure >caused by not >concentrating fully on my lust" :) >How about: >"Now I am torn between taking the path I so >desperately want to follow >and the path which everyone says I must take". Thanks for your revision! >> yoga. But I > > "yoga, but I" or "yoga. However, I" or "yoga; however, I" What's wrong with "...yoga. But I..."? SignaturePosted via a free Usenet account from http://www.teranews.com > "cybercypher" <cybercypher75@aol.com> wrote >> [quoted text clipped - 3 lines] > > What's wrong with "...yoga. But I..."? Nothing grammatically, but I prefer sentences conjoined with "but" to be complex rather than [Simple independent clause. But simple dependent clause.] Formal style prefers "A, but B." rather than "A. But B." It's a style question. SignatureFranke: EFL teacher & medical editor Native speaker of American English; posting from Taiwan. "It has come to my attention that my opinions are not universally shared." Scott Adams. windcolor filted: >Can you find any errors in the following paragraph? Yes...you have inverted exclamation points and hovering macrons where apostrophes should be.... > I¡¯m a civil servant. Everybody around me envies me and always says that you >have a stable and well-paid job, but I really don¡¯t like it. Since I practiced >yoga, I have deeply liked the exercise. So I want to leave the job and commit >myself to practice yoga. But I can¡¯t make up my mind to do it because of the >pressure from my family and friends. Now I am distracted by the desire and the >pressure. What should I do? ....r Signature"You got Schadenfreude on my Weltanschauung!" "You got Weltanschauung in my Schadenfreude!" > windcolor filted: >> [quoted text clipped - 4 lines] > >> I¡¯m a civil servant. The encoding is "Chinese Complicated". SignatureRegards John for mail: my initials plus a u e at tpg dot com dot au > Can you find any errors in the following paragraph? > [quoted text clipped - 4 lines] > pressure from my family and friends. Now I am distracted by the desire and the > pressure. What should I do? I'm a civil servant. Friends and family envy my stable and well-paid job but, frankly, I'm unhappy. I've started yoga and have become deeply devoted to it. I would like to leave my job and do nothing else. Family and friends say no and now I'm torn between my love for them and my love for yoga. What should I do? (Can't you do both?) |
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