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hay - 11 Aug 2006 04:05 GMT

Usually,there is little warning of earthquakes,floods,drought,or war.
Before these tragedies,your life is usually good-having a house,family,friends and lived in community.
When natural disasters or conflict strike break out.people life become upside down,and survivors have to deal with more than physical injuries.
During the chaos,children and adults witness their home being destroued or left their home for safety.
Many people lose their family members,friends and neighbors.
They witness or experience the process of destroy,and live in the state of terror,starvation,and thirst.
These painful memory lead to fear,depression,anger,anxiety,or other reactions of psychological ,which may remaild in people¡¦s mind years,decades or even remaid.
Children,in particular,is hard to deal with the trauma.
Doctor without Bonder reaziled that their patients needed more than medicine and bandages.
In 1993,Doctor without Bonder launched the frist comprehensive mental health program to respond the mental needs of people of Bosnia and Croatia which was affected by war.
They opened counseling centers and trained the local counselors to help them break the cultural barriers between volunteers of international and Bosnians.
This program responded to the emotional trauma of thousands of people including children,affected by the war and atrocities they had witnessed.
¡§We spent much time with children and their parents.¡¨says child psychiatrist Catherine Bonnet.
¡§Ask children to describe what they experience in war and how they felt is very hard.¡¨
She employed one way,that is art therapy.
She reaziled that to help children make sense of,and express their trauma she frist needed to find way for connection with them.
Drawing can allow children communicate their thoughts to her and help them to work through with anxieties and fears.
Out of these art therapy in Bosnia,Doctor without Border created an exhibit called childhoods interrupted by war.
One hundred 6 to 12 years old Bosnia children answered three question thought picture:How about your life before the war?
What is your life during the war?
How will you draw your further?

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Dan - 11 Aug 2006 05:56 GMT

> Usually,there is little warning of earthquakes,floods,drought,or war.

Context would be helpful. In this sentence and hereinafter, you need spaces
after the commas. I wouldn't pluralize earthquakes or floods or I would
pluralize drought and war. It would make the sentence sound more fluid, to
say nothing of grammar.

> Before these tragedies,your life is usually good-having a
> house,family,friends and lived in community.

"Having" needs to refer to oneself and not one's life. Get rid of the dash.
Maybe you could make it a colon or, better yet, a period.

> When natural disasters or conflict strike break out.people life become
> upside down,and survivors have to deal with more than physical injuries.

Suggestion --> Natural disasters and conflicts break people out of their
lives. Survivors have to deal with more than physical injuries.

> During the chaos,children and adults witness their home being destroued or
> left their home for safety.

destroued is misspelled. Also, home should be homes in both instances.
Also, add "they" after "or" and before "left"

> Many people lose their family members,friends and neighbors.

> They witness or experience the process of destroy,and live in the state of
> terror,starvation,and thirst.

destroy should probably be destruction -- and you should choose either
witness or experience.

> These painful memory lead to fear,depression,anger,anxiety,or other
> reactions of psychological ,which may remaild in people¡¦s mind
> years,decades or even remaid.

Suggestion --> These painful memory lead to fear, depression, anger,
anxiety, and other psychological reactions, which may remain in people's
mind years or decades.

> Children,in particular,is hard to deal with the trauma.

Suggestion --> For children in particular, it is ...

> Doctor without Bonder reaziled that their patients needed more than
> medicine and bandages.

Doctors Without Borders realized ... (note: always capitalize every word
in a title in English. You may and probably should exclude small and
insignificant words such as in, on, at, and a unless it begins the title.)

> In 1993,Doctor without Bonder launched the frist comprehensive mental
> health program to respond the mental needs of people of Bosnia and Croatia
> which was affected by war.

Doctors Without Borders ... first ...

The people were affected by the war so I suggest --> the mental health needs
of people affected by war in Bosnia and Croatia.

I suggest you work on these and repost the remainder with your corrections.
The errors are a bit extensive to address in a single posting. I certainly
haven't mentioned the extent of the errors, however, you are to be commended
for your efforts. Keep it up.

> They opened counseling centers and trained the local counselors to help
> them break the cultural barriers between volunteers of international and
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> --
> ¨Ó¦Û: º[¤jºô¸ô¦h´CÅé^»y±Ð«Ç (http://english.csie.ncnu.edu.tw/)

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Dan - 11 Aug 2006 06:00 GMT

> These painful memory lead to fear,depression,anger,anxiety,or other
> reactions of psychological ,which may remaild in people¡¦s mind
> years,decades or even remaid.

Suggestion --> These painful memories lead to fear, depression, anger,
anxiety, and other psychological reactions, which may remain in people's
minds for years or decades.

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Do these sentence have any wrong?