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MK - 27 May 2004 08:46 GMT

On this links below I put cover letter. I am not in English so there
might be a lot of mistakes, but I don't see it.

http://galaxy.uci.agh.edu.pl/~wies/cl/CL.pdf
or in html
http://galaxy.uci.agh.edu.pl/~wies/cl/CL.htm

Thanks in advance.
MK

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Irma - 27 May 2004 13:02 GMT

> On this links below I put cover letter. I am not in English so there
> might be a lot of mistakes, but I don't see it.
[quoted text clipped - 5 lines]
> Thanks in advance.
> MK

Why you didn't write the letter here? I think it will be a lot easier to
check it. I am not a native, but I have found some of your mistakes.

If I were in your shoes, I wouldn't send the letter like it is now. Sorry
to say this.

Irma.

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MK - 27 May 2004 15:01 GMT

Użytkownik MK napisał:

> On this links below I put cover letter. I am not in English so there
> might be a lot of mistakes, but I don't see it.
[quoted text clipped - 5 lines]
> Thanks in advance.
> MK

I attach text cover letter below:

Software Deweloper – (WKP_56)

I was very interested to see your advertisement on the web site
www.topjobs.pl. My friend working in your company informed me too about
recruitment so I decided to write motivation letter and send to you.

In my present position as Software Engineer in XXX I am responsible for
project and programming administration panel of mobile system. I have
over 3 years experience in programming web and databases applications, I
have solid knowledge from University of Science and Technology in Kraków
and good motivation to work with dedication. I am now seeking to broaden
my career. The position of Software Developer with your is exactly what
I am looking for and I feel that my experience, enthusiasm and
programming skills could be used to good effect by Intertact Company.

I would be very pleased to attend an interview for this position and can
be contacted by e-mail or mobile phone at the above address.

Yours sincerely

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Irma - 27 May 2004 17:29 GMT

> U?ytkownik MK napisa?:
>> On this links below I put cover letter. I am not in English so there
[quoted text clipped - 10 lines]
>
> Software Deweloper ? (WKP_56)

Developer

> I was very interested to see your advertisement on the web site
> www.topjobs.pl. My friend working in your company informed me too about
> recruitment so I decided to write motivation letter and send to you.

(I wouldn't like to start a letter with "I", so I'd put it like this:)

Your advertisement on www.topjobs.pl caught my attention, and I've also
been informed, by a friend who is working at your company, that you are
recruiting.

(When they get the letter they will know that you have written and sent it
to them, so I think you don't need to mention that.)

> In my present position as Software Engineer in XXX I am responsible for
> project and programming administration panel of mobile system. I have
[quoted text clipped - 4 lines]
> I am looking for and I feel that my experience, enthusiasm and
> programming skills could be used to good effect by Intertact Company.

(I think this part is quite well done, however I added some articles and
minor changes...)

In my present position as a Software Engineer in XXX I am responsible for
a project and in charge of the programming administration panel of a mobile
system. I have more than 3 years experience in programming web and database
applications, I have a solid knowledge in my field from my studies at the
University of Science and Technology in Krak?w, and a lot of motivation to
work with dedication. I am now seeking to broaden my career. The position
of a Software Developer with your company is exactly what I am looking for
and I feel that my experience, enthusiasm and programming skills could be
very useful for Intertact Company.

("used to good effect by Intertact Company." - for this part I couldn't
come up with something catchy, maybe someone else can?)

> I would be very pleased to attend an interview for this position and can
> be contacted by e-mail or mobile phone at the above address.

(Only minor changes here too...)

I would be very pleased to attend an interview for this position. You can
contact me by email or mobile phone. I look forward to hearing from you.

> Yours sincerely

Hope this helped!

Irma

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MK - 27 May 2004 17:49 GMT

Użytkownik Irma napisał:

> Hope this helped!
>
> Irma

Thanks, I am sure that my cover letter will be better!

Wieslaw

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