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Stefan Buhrmester wrote...
> Hi,
>
> I am trying to write an application as Game Master at Blizzard. I don't
> have any experience in writing formal british english (I am german), so
> I want to ask if somebody would be so kind and check for grammar or
so kind as to check the grammar
> maybe give some suggestions?
>
> Thanks ;-)
>
> Application as Game Master DE
Application *as* or *for* ?
> Dear Sir/Madam
Dear Sir/Madam,
> with reference to your advertisement on wow-europe.com I am writing to
> apply as Game Master (DE). At the moment I am a student at Technical
> University Darmstadt and working on my Bachelors degree in computer
> technologie.
technology
> Since role-playing-games have allways been my favourite hobby, I now am
role-playing games always
> developer and administrator of my own german browser-based RPG with
a developer
> more than 4.000 active players. In its now allmost two years of
(ugly sentence)
4,000 almost
> existance I was able to gain wide experience with people and in
existence
> supporting communities in a team. I am familiar with all sorts of
> community tools.
examples ??
> Furthermore I enjoy working with people very much, and working at a
> company like Blizzard allways has been one of my dreams, since I want
has always been
> to use my skills in a productive and enjoyable environment.
>
> Finally I enclose my CV and a copy of my educational qualification.
just the one qualification?
Usually a CV will detail qualifications, unless you a enclosing a copy of a
certificate - in which case you should say so.
> I would appriciate the opportunity to discuss matters further at a
not finally?
appreciate
> personal interview
full stop.
> Yours faithfully,
> Stefan Buhrmester
Tom - 16 Dec 2004 22:03 GMT
Tom wrote...
> Stefan Buhrmester wrote...
>> developer and administrator of my own german browser-based RPG with
missed one...
German
You should also probably provide them with the URL
Stefan Buhrmester - 18 Dec 2004 10:04 GMT
> Tom wrote...
> [very much helpfull stuff]
Thank you :) !!!

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Tom - 18 Dec 2004 10:33 GMT
Stefan Buhrmester wrote...
>> Tom wrote...
>> [very much helpfull stuff]
[sigh]
RTFD
Stefan Buhrmester - 18 Dec 2004 11:06 GMT
> Stefan Buhrmester wrote...
>>> Tom wrote...
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>
> RTFD
i'm solly :/

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Run it through a spell-check routine...
technology
always
almost
4,000 (Americans and Britains use the comma, not the period)
Otherwise it looks fine