Please help me correct this short letter to a Prof.

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mozert11 - 23 Jan 2006 14:11 GMT

it is me again :) dudes. here is the letter:
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Professor BIGPROF1,

I am a prospective student, I have applied to the Ph.D. graduate
research program in mathematics.

You may be interested by my application package. I thought it wouldn't
be a bad idea to let you know in advance, so that you can preview my
application. If you have some comments or some additional questions,
please let me know. I will be pleased to give answers either by e-mail
or by direct interview.

John Smith,
Department of mathematics,
BIGUNIV.

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thank you in advance for your help everyone!!

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Paul Burke - 23 Jan 2006 14:49 GMT

> it is me again :) dudes. here is the letter:

No dude I. Dud perhaps.

> I am a prospective student,

"As a prospective student," or separate the sentences with a full stop.

> You may be interested by my application package. I thought it wouldn't
> be a bad idea to let you know in advance, so that you can preview my
> application.

Sounds a bit cumbersome, and at the same time a bit over- familiar, to
me. Do you know him? Maybe somethiung like "Perhaps you would like to
preview my ..." would be better.

> If you have any comments oradditional questions,
> please let me know. I will be pleased to give answers either by e-mail
> or by direct interview.

Otherwise pretty good.

Paul Burke

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mozert11 - 23 Jan 2006 15:07 GMT

Here is how it looks now:
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Professor BIGPROF1,

As a prospective student, I have applied to the Ph.D. graduate research
program in mathematics.

Perhaps you would like to preview my application, since you may be
interested. If you have any comments or additional questions, please
let me know. I will be pleased to provide answers either by e-mail or
by direct interview.

John Smith,
Department of mathematics,
BIGUNIV.

__

Is it ok? Any comments is welcomed!

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Paul Burke - 23 Jan 2006 16:15 GMT

> Here is how it looks now:

> Is it ok? Any comments is welcomed!

Yes, it's fine. You are a credit to your teachers.

Paul Burke

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Molly Mockford - 23 Jan 2006 19:16 GMT

At 07:07:03 on Mon, 23 Jan 2006, mozert11 <mozert1@gmail.com> wrote in
<1138028823.870185.207980@f14g2000cwb.googlegroups.com>:

>Professor BIGPROF1,

Dear Professor BIGPROF1,

>John Smith,

Yours sincerely,
John Smith

>Department of mathematics,

Department of Mathematics

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Molly Mockford
They that can give up essential liberty to obtain a little temporary safety
deserve neither liberty nor safety - Benjamin Franklin
(My Reply-To address *is* valid, though may not remain so for ever.)

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ADPUF - 24 Jan 2006 19:42 GMT

16:07, lunedì 23 gennaio 2006, mozert11:

> Is it ok? Any comments is welcomed!

"Welcomed"?

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Paul Burke - 25 Jan 2006 08:11 GMT

>>Is it ok? Any comments is welcomed!
>
> "Welcomed"?

He wasn't asking for comments on that bit.

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Molly Mockford - 25 Jan 2006 08:55 GMT

At 08:11:36 on Wed, 25 Jan 2006, Paul Burke <paul@scazon.com> wrote in
<43oq8dF1ojnfnU1@individual.net>:

>>>Is it ok? Any comments is welcomed!
>> "Welcomed"?
>
>He wasn't asking for comments on that bit.

Besides, there's absolutely nothing wrong with "welcomed". The "is" is
the problem.

"Any comments are welcome" or "Any comments will be welcomed" are both
just fine.

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mozert11 - 25 Jan 2006 12:53 GMT

wep.. thank you for your comments everyone. I will have a last request
for corrections in a new thread to come, so keep watching. Thank you
again for your valuable time.

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mozert11 - 23 Jan 2006 15:11 GMT

Finally I replaced:
", since you may be interested."
by ", since you might be interested."

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Please help me correct this short letter to a Prof.