Does this paragraph sound alright?

Thread view:

Enable EMail Alerts

Start New Thread

Thread rating:

Trung Chinh Nguyen - 27 Apr 2006 16:59 GMT

Hi, I am a third year student studying Computer Science at the
University of Nottingham. I need help with a small part of my dissertation:

"Since the evolution of computer science, digital images have become
widely used. But in many cases, the sizes of the images are much bigger
than that of the screen, especially for small screen devices. This may
result in the user being able to view only a part of the image and the
contents of the document containing it. Many applications just simply
ignore that problem or solve it with a simple resization. This project
aims to solve the problem in a better way. By analysing the information
in the image and then applying wavelet transforms, I am expecting to
provide a good adaptation of the image so that it can be displayed on
the screen at a good quality without occupying much space."

In my opinion there is some problem with the change from "the images" in
the second sentence to "the image" in the others. I'm trying to make it
better but it's very hard for me since English is my second language.
Please help me fix the errors so the paragraph can be in a good English
written style. Thank you very much in advance

Reply to this Message

Molly Mockford - 27 Apr 2006 18:10 GMT

At 15:59:39 on Thu, 27 Apr 2006, Trung Chinh Nguyen
<chinhnt2k3@gmail.com> wrote in
<LT54g.3285$l91.49@newsfe6-gui.ntli.net>:

>In my opinion there is some problem with the change from "the images"
>in the second sentence to "the image" in the others. I'm trying to make
>it better but it's very hard for me since English is my second
>language. Please help me fix the errors so the paragraph can be in a
>good English written style. Thank you very much in advance

It's very good - better than most people with English as their first
language would have produced. I see no problem at all in moving from
"the images" to "the image", but if you wanted to make the distinction
as clear as possible you could change "the image" to "an image". There
are only three other points:

"resization" probably doesn't exist - at least, I've never come across
it! I recommend "with simple resizing" instead.

"Many applications just simply ignore..." - you don't need both "just"
and "simply". Drop the "just".

"I am expecting to provide..." - there's nothing actually wrong with
that, but in the tone of the general paragraph I think that "I expect to
provide..." would be slightly better.

Signature

Molly Mockford
They that can give up essential liberty to obtain a little temporary safety
deserve neither liberty nor safety - Benjamin Franklin
(My Reply-To address *is* valid, though may not remain so for ever.)

Reply to this Message

John of Aix - 27 Apr 2006 19:06 GMT

> Hi, I am a third year student studying Computer Science at the
> University of Nottingham. I need help with a small part of my
[quoted text clipped - 16 lines]
> language. Please help me fix the errors so the paragraph can be in a
> good English written style. Thank you very much in advance

I would say "the size of the images is..", as you say "but in many
cases". This makes what you are talking about general, so the 'one' size
means the (one) size of each indivudual images (plural).

'Resization' is not a word. You can either use 'resize' (it can be a
noun, a resize) or 'resizing'.

For the last sentence I prefer " can be displayed on the screen WITH
good quality...' (no article), but I think your version is OK
nevertheless.

Apart from this, I would like to echo the comments of Molly on the
excellence of your English, well done.

Reply to this Message

Nick Wagg - 28 Apr 2006 09:07 GMT

> Hi, I am a third year student studying Computer Science at the
> University of Nottingham. I need help with a small part of my dissertation:

I agree with both Molly and John. "Me too" posts are usually frowned
on in usenet but I just wanted to encourage you and compliment you
on the standard of your English.

Reply to this Message

Nguyen Trung Chinh - 29 Apr 2006 12:56 GMT

Thank you very much for your helps :)

Reply to this Message

John of Aix - 29 Apr 2006 17:03 GMT

> Thank you very much for your helps :)

Tut! You were doing so well. No 's' on 'help' ;-)

Reply to this Message

Trung Chinh Nguyen - 29 Apr 2006 17:58 GMT

> Tut! You were doing so well. No 's' on 'help' ;-)

lol thanks, seems like google is not a good place to do grammar/spell
checking

Reply to this Message

Vic - 18 May 2006 12:10 GMT

Trung,

I think that you are introducing too many ideas in this paragraph. It
is difficult for me to see one unifying idea that could be used to
describe this paragraph. For example, the problems with digital images
represented on computer screens. I would distribute the ideas that you
are presenting here over the body of sections that you will include in
your dissertation.

Also be careful with demonstratives such as 'this' at the beginning of
the sentence as it is not clear (at least in this case) what you are
referring to.

Vic

Reply to this Message

Discussion Groups / British English / May 2006

Does this paragraph sound alright?