Discussion Groups / British English / May 2006

Tes chambres d'hôtes sont une entreprise. Tu reçois de l'argent pour les
services fournis. Alors vois-tu une bonne raison pour que quelqu'un qui
te fournit une service de traduction (la tienne est infecte) ne soit pas
payé pour ses services aussi? Moi non.

Andre,

I will highlight a couple of areas where I see problems.

You are mixing registers here. The word assets would be used in
business communication. You are also introducing two subjects. You need
to continue the idea of Correze and then finish the sentence. You then
need to begin a new sentence about the rooms.

Again you are mixing registers. This also creates an impression in
English that I don't think you want.

Here you are mixing collocating words. To deal with an animal would
imply that the animal is problematic or perhaps dangerous.

I would suggest that you look at models of language within this genre
to help you with your writing. There are about a million types of
brochure like this on the internet that you could look at. Take the
phrases and expressions that are similar to what you need here.

Vic